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AYFR
12-20-2006, 08:26 AM
All of these were written by myself


The Bond of Marriage
Two lives intertwined
Two hearts beating as one
Alive by faith and love
A bond forged by God
That man can not break
An eternal force so strong
That it can not be stopped.


Marriage is
Doing the dishes with being asked
A glass of tea to quench the thirst
A massasage after a stressed filled day
Watching a game on Sunday
And a romance on Saturday
Stealing the covers
And enduring snoring
It is
Never going to bed angry
And an "I'm sorry"
when your wrong.
Forgiving and forgetting
And I love you's
It is
Having kids
And growing old
Fighting and making up
Hard work and fun times
Both frustrating and enjoyable
And best of all
No matter what happens
or has happened
It is
Love



Tool of God.
I am a tool of God.
I wonder how He will use me.
I hear the cries of lost souls.
I see God's tears.
I want to lead them home.
I am a tool of God.

I pretend that I have great faith.
I feel that I'm not worthy.
I touch hearts of stone.
I worry I can't help.
I cry for lost.
I am a tool of God.

I understand He empowers me.
I say God walks with me.
I dream for His grace on everybody.
I try to do as He asks.
I hope that I can make a difference.
I am a tool of God.
sparks
12-20-2006, 08:38 AM
The first word that comes to mind is "idealistic". Not that that's a bad thing! :lol
DATA
12-20-2006, 08:38 AM
The first word that comes to mind is "idealistic". Not that that's a bad thing! :lol

What was the second?I am surprised to hear that you are not that's a bad thing.
I'm glad you find this amusing.
Indy
12-20-2006, 08:51 AM
I like 'Tool of God.' Very nice work.
AYFR
12-20-2006, 09:10 AM
Thank you Indy, and sparks (I think?)Do you mean idealistic as in niave?
sparks
12-20-2006, 09:24 AM
Thank you Indy, and sparks (I think?)Do you mean idealistic as in niave?

Perhaps.

The fact is that the bond of marriage isn't so eternal. Many folks get divorced even in a Christian marriage, and remarry several times. The poem reflects the ideal.

And marriage is what you make it (which the poem reflects to a degree)...it's not always love though...there is a fine line that is crossed on occasion. With any luck one can cross back over the line and find the love again. This poem was my favorite of the bunch though. To me it had more realism than the others. :lol

I do believe we're all tools of God, albeit sometimes in spite of ourselves. I don't believe people's motives are all that noble all the time. Maybe I'm becoming a cynic in my old age? I like to think of it as being a realist.

However, I do have my own idealistic notions at times too. :wink
AYFR
12-20-2006, 09:34 AM
Ok fair enough, as for divorce personally I think that it should be illegal but that is just me. It would cut down on all those marriage for fun and the hell of it marriages.
It would also make a person think REAL hard before they got married.
DATA
12-20-2006, 09:34 AM
Ok fair enough, as for divorce personally I think that it should be illegal but that is just me. It would cut down on all those marriage for fun and the hell of it marriages.
It would also make a person think REAL hard before they got married.

OK I will call you
Fair Enough As For Divorce Personally I Think That It Should Be Illegal But That.

Are you a man or a woman?
Whoa.Tell me more about it.Tell me more about it.
FunDeeMental
12-20-2006, 10:13 AM
:clap Very nice indeed!
DATA
12-20-2006, 10:13 AM
:clap Very nice indeed!

When do you think artificial intelligence will replace lawyers?
Dawn
12-20-2006, 11:04 AM
All of these were written by myself


The Bond of Marriage
Two lives intertwined
Two hearts beating as one
Alive by faith and love
A bond forged by God
That man can not break
An eternal force so strong
That it can not be stopped.


Marriage is
Doing the dishes with being asked
A glass of tea to quench the thirst
A massasage after a stressed filled day
Watching a game on Sunday
And a romance on Saturday
Stealing the covers
And enduring snoring
It is
Never going to bed angry
And an "I'm sorry"
when your wrong.
Forgiving and forgetting
And I love you's
It is
Having kids
And growing old
Fighting and making up
Hard work and fun times
Both frustrating and enjoyable
And best of all
No matter what happens
or has happened
It is
Love



Tool of God.
I am a tool of God.
I wonder how He will use me.
I hear the cries of lost souls.
I see God's tears.
I want to lead them home.
I am a tool of God.

I pretend that I have great faith.
I feel that I'm not worthy.
I touch hearts of stone.
I worry I can't help.
I cry for lost.
I am a tool of God.

I understand He empowers me.
I say God walks with me.
I dream for His grace on everybody.
I try to do as He asks.
I hope that I can make a difference.
I am a tool of God.


I liked them all, especially the first one.
AYFR
12-20-2006, 11:05 AM
Thank you
DATA
12-20-2006, 11:05 AM
Thank you

you are quite welcome.
AYFR
12-20-2006, 11:06 AM
What a dolt
TrueBlue
12-20-2006, 11:13 AM
Nice poems, AYFR. :)
AYFR
12-20-2006, 11:14 AM
Thanks
DATA
12-20-2006, 11:14 AM
Thanks

Don't mention it.
FunDeeMental
12-20-2006, 12:39 PM
:rofl

:slap
DATA
12-20-2006, 12:39 PM
:rofl

:slap

I'm glad you find this amusing. My brain uses AIML to format responses to your inputs, but I don't have one for that.